Hey lads. Jarlium here.

So this is the: MONTH OF BRUTAL CRITICISM!

For every art I make this month I would like you guys to critique my stuff so I can get better!

Be direct, be MEAN. Give me your worst. I have a cast iron stomach for critique!

Notes:
- It will be several weeks between your comments and any improvements as I wait 3 weeks between posting and completion because patreon.
- If possible keep your critique contained to this specific piece. I have already been thoroughly informed of general mistakes I do ^^

Jarlium said:
Hey lads. Jarlium here.

So this is the: MONTH OF BRUTAL CRITICISM!

For every art I make this month I would like you guys to critique my stuff so I can get better!

Be direct, be MEAN. Give me your worst. I have a cast iron stomach for critique!

Notes:
- It will be several weeks between your comments and any improvements as I wait 3 weeks between posting and completion because patreon.
- If possible keep your critique contained to this specific piece. I have already been thoroughly informed of general mistakes I do ^^

the lads beneath look a bit close to the roof

jarlium said:
Hey lads. Jarlium here.

So this is the: MONTH OF BRUTAL CRITICISM!

For every art I make this month I would like you guys to critique my stuff so I can get better!

Be direct, be MEAN. Give me your worst. I have a cast iron stomach for critique!

Notes:
- It will be several weeks between your comments and any improvements as I wait 3 weeks between posting and completion because patreon.
- If possible keep your critique contained to this specific piece. I have already been thoroughly informed of general mistakes I do ^^

The nipples look a bit small and not too well drawn, while the vagina looks overblown and almost like a camel toe.

Hope this helps.

jab_the_tab said:

the lads beneath look a bit close to the roof

Hmmmmmmm. That is a fair point.

Now I am going to be fully honest. I do not have the faintest idea on how to fix that.
If anyone has I would love to hear it.

dirtyratmatt said:
The nipples look a bit small and not too well drawn, while the vagina looks overblown and almost like a camel toe.

Hope this helps.

Really does. As I do not really draw ladies there are areas I have to improve a ton on!

jarlium said:
Really does. As I do not really draw ladies there are areas I have to improve a ton on!

gayass smh my head

jarlium said:
Hey lads. Jarlium here.

So this is the: MONTH OF BRUTAL CRITICISM!

For every art I make this month I would like you guys to critique my stuff so I can get better!

Be direct, be MEAN. Give me your worst. I have a cast iron stomach for critique!

Notes:
- It will be several weeks between your comments and any improvements as I wait 3 weeks between posting and completion because patreon.
- If possible keep your critique contained to this specific piece. I have already been thoroughly informed of general mistakes I do ^^

I say this as someone who isn't a artist (so take that grain of salt with this) but the only part that looks like it's touching the glass are the breasts, and I doubt she's balancing on her breasts.