I commissioned this comic a long time ago and my god the dialogue was awful. I came across this again and decided to test my editing skills. I overhauled the dialogue by changing it and even removing some speech bubbles in some panels to make it more immersive. Hope you enjoy the new version :) I left out the ending as people hated the original ending (Ended up with Xander proposing to Jake). This seems like a more appropriate ending, so the original ending wasn't needed..

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