bleh. I accidentally uploaded the e621 copy in a way too large resolution again.

OHHH WELLLLL~ *shrug*

To the artist-

Brevity is difficult for everyone to learn but I believe it applies here. The viewers do not need to see every scrap of clothing taken off. Consider a shot with him his tops both being lifted off, then cutting to him undressed, or at least having his tops off, saving panels. Supplement that with his mother's reactions, hesitence, encouragement, etc, and you have a much more interesting page.

-Sincerly, a hopeful fan.

Kitsune_Wizard said:
To the artist-

Brevity is difficult for everyone to learn but I believe it applies here. The viewers do not need to see every scrap of clothing taken off. Consider a shot with him his tops both being lifted off, then cutting to him undressed, or at least having his tops off, saving panels. Supplement that with his mother's reactions, hesitence, encouragement, etc, and you have a much more interesting page.

-Sincerly, a hopeful fan.

Thanks for the criticism!I will say though, next page was supposed to have Llori's reactions and all, since i have everything planned out already, but still, I'll have to remember things like that it in the future. As I'm sure you (and other readers) guessed at this point, Sexual activity ain't my forté lol. So, it's good to have folks giving me some pointers!

Jackywind said:
Thanks for the criticism!I will say though, next page was supposed to have Llori's reactions and all, since i have everything planned out already, but still, I'll have to remember things like that it in the future. As I'm sure you (and other readers) guessed at this point, Sexual activity ain't my forté lol. So, it's good to have folks giving me some pointers!

It may not be what you specialize in, but I think you have a knack for character detail that makes it so believable and natural!

I know I'm in a minority when it comes to this, yet I wanted to say that I personally adore a slow pace in erotica because it allows for details *exactly* like these. I thought it was beyond cute seeing him shaking and struggling with his clothes shot for shot, it showed how he's probably still just as nervous as she is but he's too excited to take his time. X3

It's fantastic criticism that I do agree with, I just wanted to add that emphasizing the little details like this is something I'm sure other people are enjoying too, it's a niche interest that you fill super well. I guess my point's that slowing the pace down to make room for character building details like these can also be considered a unique strength to remember. Finding a balance between the two would be great if you ever do something like this again, it's a tricky thing to do so thank you for the effort either way. :3

I think part of what might be frustrating for people is that updates are not all that terribly frequent (twice a month or so it seems) and are being funded page-by-page. I'm not criticizing either of those things - I think an artist should be supported for his work and I think quality is worth waiting for - but it can be a little bit frustrating when you only get one page every 15 days and the new page is not much really going on.

I do agree with some of the others that this page is valuable and I do actually like the pacing of this comic overall, but I certainly understand (and to some extent also agree) that, particularly in real time, it's taking perhaps a bit too long to get where we're going.

That being said this (and its parent comic) is some of the stuff I'm most enjoying on e6 right now. Always exciting to see a new page go up. :)

Killah_Zillah said:
It may not be what you specialize in, but I think you have a knack for character detail that makes it so believable and natural!

I know I'm in a minority when it comes to this, yet I wanted to say that I personally adore a slow pace in erotica because it allows for details *exactly* like these. I thought it was beyond cute seeing him shaking and struggling with his clothes shot for shot, it showed how he's probably still just as nervous as she is but he's too excited to take his time. X3

It's fantastic criticism that I do agree with, I just wanted to add that emphasizing the little details like this is something I'm sure other people are enjoying too, it's a niche interest that you fill super well. I guess my point's that slowing the pace down to make room for character building details like these can also be considered a unique strength to remember. Finding a balance between the two would be great if you ever do something like this again, it's a tricky thing to do so thank you for the effort either way. :3

I follow! and thanks for the kind words! ^^

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